I like the graphic style of this drawing and I really like your limited (tonal) palette of greys. This works really nice against that punch of red blood. That said, the drawing seems unfinished...the bodies disappear at the characters' waists and everyone seems to be looking in different directions. I'm just know sure what is happening here. I feel the "story" behind the drawing would be much stronger if the characters were crowded around and more focused on the severed head. Nice job!
Why do I feel like somebody told a great Zombie joke in this scene?
It's true. Your characters look half done. In rougher drawings I think you could get away with that, but since this is nice and inked it looks a bit out of place.
Other than that, I like this a lot. Nice drawings. Clean inks. And I do like the limited colors.
I like the graphic approach. It would have been nicer to turn the two bodies on the right/left toward the action (the head in the middle) instead of all three facing dead forward. -Tracy
This piece does feel unfinished. It's fine that it's a graphic technique, but the flatter and more graphic the execution, the more important it is to make sure the composition is set to complete the scene. If the head is the focus of the zombies, then make sure the viewers eyes will keep coming around to it and not get lost off the page. We want to be part of the scene with them! Good job though!
These must be the waitresses at the restaurant. I feel sad for the head. They are laughing at him, but he can't do anything, 'cause he is just a dead head. I'd like to see this with their midsections going to the end of the page. Maybe have a border around them or something. It will help the image look more finished.
What a fun piece! Great use of line variation and color choices.
Check out those teeth! I like all the different expressions.
I would have like to have seen some suggestion of a background at least - a couple of lines or a background color.
I fell like the head at the bottom is too close to the bottom edge of the picture, if you extended the frame evn a tiny bit it would definitely benefit. I also dont get the feeling that and the female zombie isn't actually holding it. Perhaps having someone pose could help in making it read more clearly. It seems to just float at this point.
Lastly, I think that this would have been even stronger if you had made it clearer what was going on. Right now, we can probably make up a few scenarios, but having one hit you over the head would hav packed a bigger punch.
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I like the graphic style of this drawing and I really like your limited (tonal) palette of greys. This works really nice against that punch of red blood. That said, the drawing seems unfinished...the bodies disappear at the characters' waists and everyone seems to be looking in different directions. I'm just know sure what is happening here. I feel the "story" behind the drawing would be much stronger if the characters were crowded around and more focused on the severed head. Nice job!
B Raz,
I agree that the background characters seem to be looking in different directions. Changing the focal point to the severed head will help.
Bloody good job mate!
Why do I feel like somebody told a great Zombie joke in this scene?
It's true. Your characters look half done. In rougher drawings I think you could get away with that, but since this is nice and inked it looks a bit out of place.
Other than that, I like this a lot. Nice drawings. Clean inks. And I do like the limited colors.
Very nice work.
I like the graphic approach. It would have been nicer to turn the two bodies on the right/left toward the action (the head in the middle) instead of all three facing dead forward.
-Tracy
This piece does feel unfinished. It's fine that it's a graphic technique, but the flatter and more graphic the execution, the more important it is to make sure the composition is set to complete the scene. If the head is the focus of the zombies, then make sure the viewers eyes will keep coming around to it and not get lost off the page. We want to be part of the scene with them!
Good job though!
-Kellee
These must be the waitresses at the restaurant. I feel sad for the head. They are laughing at him, but he can't do anything, 'cause he is just a dead head. I'd like to see this with their midsections going to the end of the page. Maybe have a border around them or something. It will help the image look more finished.
What a fun piece! Great use of line variation and color choices.
Check out those teeth! I like all the different expressions.
I would have like to have seen some suggestion of a background at least - a couple of lines or a background color.
I fell like the head at the bottom is too close to the bottom edge of the picture, if you extended the frame evn a tiny bit it would definitely benefit. I also dont get the feeling that and the female zombie isn't actually holding it. Perhaps having someone pose could help in making it read more clearly. It seems to just float at this point.
Lastly, I think that this would have been even stronger if you had made it clearer what was going on. Right now, we can probably make up a few scenarios, but having one hit you over the head would hav packed a bigger punch.
that last comment was mine, sorry Joe! I forgot to sign my name.
-Jenny
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